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Age 29, Male
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Joined on 7/29/09
'Tis Great, but needs more Character analysis, We don't know who the main character is, who the man that gave him the job, and all we know is Jim Crowley is a poorly trained Psychiatrist if he can't deal with this patient mentally.
Unless this was an cut out of the Real Story, Either way, it was great.
Good Cliff Hanger at the end, kind of obvious but it was enjoyable.
Thank you.
Much appreciated.
I liked it. Grammar mistakes make my OCD act up, though.
I'm having writer's block right now. Makes me sad.
Lol, sorry, I'm working on my grammar.
And, well inspiration is the best prescription. Go read some books!
holy shit, obvious ending.
the description of the overall situation was pretty good, some pretty good metaphors and descriptions here and there, but the plot felt pretty cliche and the characters are pretty much just dangling carrots. the main guy was pretty much just like any other 'hardboiled hero' character that seems to permeate the noir and detective genres mostly.
basically its cliche ridden and mostly free from independent thought, whichis a bad thing. plus the gramamr isnt all that great for something thats trying to be a fiarly serious writing, although i cant really say anything because mines incredibly shitty too.
Oh god, did you really just do that?
kevin bacon april f00lz filter = lulzy
lochnessgirl
i i i LOVED IT!
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Thanks :D